This looks really good! I would eliminate one word, to make your business exactly clear:
We offer a wide array of mortgage field services to the real estate broker, banking, mortgage and foreclosure industries. We specialize in REO`s and foreclosed properties.
You can lose the "mortgage" because it sounds too much as if you offer bank loans, or you refinance mortgages. Removing that word makes what you do focus on "field services." Then you can spend content on a sales pitch about field services and what they are.
When you use acronyms like REO (they don`t use apostrophes), you always should spell them out at least the first time. Otherwise people won`t know that you`re talking about the rock band, REO Speedwagon
Otherwise, your "clicked" links almost disappear so color adjustment would help, as Webline mentioned above.
I really like your link to the map of Northeast Ohio. However, if you know how to do it, I think a pop-up map in a window would be more helpful. That way people can return more easily to the sentence and continue reading. If you don`t know the tools, then perhaps put a "Back to Home Page" link below the map itself.
Definitely a lot better than the original. :-)