Sales/Intro Letter, Please critique http://www.startupnation.com/community/orca/topic/SalesIntro-Letter-Please-critique.htm Sales/Intro Letter, Please critique Fri, 30 Jan 2009 22:21:01 GMT <![CDATA[Bleah.  Go read some books ]]> http://www.startupnation.com/community/orca/topic/SalesIntro-Letter-Please-critique.htm Fri, 30 Jan 2009 22:21:01 GMT http://www.startupnation.com/community/orca/topic/SalesIntro-Letter-Please-critique.htm#742679 <![CDATA[I re-worked it and focused on th]]> http://www.startupnation.com/community/orca/topic/SalesIntro-Letter-Please-critique.htm Fri, 30 Jan 2009 22:21:01 GMT http://www.startupnation.com/community/orca/topic/SalesIntro-Letter-Please-critique.htm#742678 <![CDATA[It`s way to impersonal as well. ]]> http://www.startupnation.com/community/orca/topic/SalesIntro-Letter-Please-critique.htm Fri, 30 Jan 2009 22:21:01 GMT http://www.startupnation.com/community/orca/topic/SalesIntro-Letter-Please-critique.htm#742677 <![CDATA[ Hi Katherine,   I]]> http://www.startupnation.com/community/orca/topic/SalesIntro-Letter-Please-critique.htm Fri, 30 Jan 2009 22:21:01 GMT http://www.startupnation.com/community/orca/topic/SalesIntro-Letter-Please-critique.htm#742676 <![CDATA[ Make the "WIIFM" portion ver]]> http://www.startupnation.com/community/orca/topic/SalesIntro-Letter-Please-critique.htm Fri, 30 Jan 2009 22:21:01 GMT http://www.startupnation.com/community/orca/topic/SalesIntro-Letter-Please-critique.htm#742675 <![CDATA[This is just an introduction let]]> http://www.startupnation.com/community/orca/topic/SalesIntro-Letter-Please-critique.htm Fri, 30 Jan 2009 22:21:01 GMT http://www.startupnation.com/community/orca/topic/SalesIntro-Letter-Please-critique.htm#742674 <![CDATA[I recommend backing up at least ]]> http://www.startupnation.com/community/orca/topic/SalesIntro-Letter-Please-critique.htm Fri, 30 Jan 2009 22:21:01 GMT http://www.startupnation.com/community/orca/topic/SalesIntro-Letter-Please-critique.htm#742673 <![CDATA[Number 1 - Never send something ]]> http://www.startupnation.com/community/orca/topic/SalesIntro-Letter-Please-critique.htm Fri, 30 Jan 2009 22:21:01 GMT http://www.startupnation.com/community/orca/topic/SalesIntro-Letter-Please-critique.htm#742672 <![CDATA[ K.A.N.Y.C. ]]> http://www.startupnation.com/community/orca/topic/SalesIntro-Letter-Please-critique.htm Fri, 30 Jan 2009 22:21:01 GMT http://www.startupnation.com/community/orca/topic/SalesIntro-Letter-Please-critique.htm#742671