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Any feedback will be greatly appreciated.
I will not say much here, i want to see what you think and if you understand what i am working on to accomplish.
www.gopurenow.com
Dan
www.gopurenow.com
PÜR INDUSTRIES, INC
President
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| Nov. 20 2008 at 6:50 PM |
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Your first, or "entry" page, serves no purpose.....I already know I'm at your site, so why do I need to "enter" it?
Then after entering the site, I see a large water image, a top menu, and what I guess are some type of headlines .... This is where I should, within a few seconds, get the idea of what your site is about, but I don't .... without scrolling, I''m clueless as to why I'm here or what you're offering me.
Your headline dates are not in the correct order, but tell me why I would be interested in the fact that you are using a certain marketing system, linking with a senior care service, or anything else along these lines, when I still have no idea what you are offering me? All I can assume to this point is that, with the word PUR, and the water image, you are in the water filtration business? Bottled water? Am I close?
Nope ... when I scroll down I start to see what you actually do, but you have such a long wordy explanation that I had to read it 3 times to understand it .... you need to get your sites "concept" across quickly and easily, and I just don't see that.
Your "About" page is just a repeat of what is on the main page .... nothing new to inform me.
Maybe it's me, and I'm not trying to sound mean or anything, but I guess I just don't "get" what you are doing, or offering me, right away and to be honest, the main page confused me enough that I didn't care to look into it too far ....
Edited by: Webline - Nov. 20 2008 at 6:50 PMM Hall
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| Nov. 20 2008 at 7:12 PM |
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I hear ya,
Ok... what i am doing with this, is i am going door to door, (business to business) in vancouver promoting my website but also a service that 1800getleads provides. i'm an excellent sales men but a amateur web designer - this is my first site i ever built.
the real pitch is the solution of what 1800getleads does (thats where i make my money right now). but thats beside that fact.
ur not being mean, its constructive criticism and thank you for your honesty. its what the world needs.
i will start making changes right now.
anyone else?
Edited by: justMEworld - Nov. 20 2008 at 7:12 PMDan
www.gopurenow.com
PÜR INDUSTRIES, INC
President
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| Nov. 20 2008 at 9:19 PM |
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I just re hauled the web page to make it flow more effectively and re did the entire front page. can you take a look at it now and give me feedback?
Dan
www.gopurenow.com
PÜR INDUSTRIES, INC
President
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