Will what work? The website or the business plan?
In either case, my answer is, probably not.
As far as the website goes, it`s simply a slide show. Most people would click off in the first minute or two because of either the subject or the crappy - really bad quality audio. The voice and pacing is good but the audio sounds like something recorded in the toilet.
On the business plan - MLM`s almost always fail. This one, I think, is predictable to fail because there is no way segment the market and everyone in the chain is competing for the same customers. How many Starbucks can you put on the same corner?
If you were not looking for a website critique, then please find somewhere else to peddle your concept.
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