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lewiswharf

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May 20, 2009 7:23 PM ET    Quote  Report Abuse
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Then the last sentence says: How are you taking on life?

That locks in your own view that "take on life" is an action not a contemplation. If you ended with "What`s your take on life?" then you`d be locking in the contemplative aspect.


Indeed, very good point.


I`d simply remove the last sentence and leave it with, "Love more. Laugh more. Take on life." Make sense?



Done. Thank you! Send me your address using my contact form and I will mail you some stickers :-)

Thank you for the guidance and great insight!



lewiswharf5/20/2009 7:19 PM
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