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Hi,

I had no knowledge at all about web designing or any other programs supporting webdesign until I started my own business. And with really limited budget, I had no choice but to learn the magic myself. After several days of browsing around, I finally settled on Yahoo because it has this sitebuilder to help illiterate computer program people like me to build a website.

It was such a struggle. I was working for so many hours for the first four days and still went no where. So I did this , and on the fifth day, I deleted all what I did and started all over again and finally after doing all and the best I could, the website was finally published with the domain name of  www.axialace.com.

Now, , please give me critique. Without critique I would not know how to improve the web more, but at the same time I am also nervous of not knowing how to do any improvement after the critique.

Thanks,

Dyen

Hello Dyen,

Nice job - It is very professional looking!  The products are very well organized and easy to find.  Good level of detail in the descriptions as well.   

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Warmest regards,

Michelle Waldorf -- eSeller Street -- eBay Market Research

I would suggest you at least hire somebody to write the site’s content, better still hire a web designer.

It is not immediately apparent what you do or how you do it. It should say “We do this for you” and “You need us because” on the first page. There are a myriad of sentences that don’t make sense for instance on the first paragraph:
“Axialace means the intertwining center of networks”
Do what now? Not sure what you are trying to say here, you should remember that if you need explain it, it’s no good.

“With our office situated in the equator"
Situated on the equator? Were on the equator? that is like saying on ‘Parallel 0` it could be in Australia or Ecuador.
 
“between Asia, Australia, Africa and North America”
Again, were is that?! There is no such place in the world. At this point I`d go no further and turn around.

“we have the ability to act as the bridge of the world in supplying any commodities that your company needs.” Commodities are products people/companies trade in the open market, companies use supplies.

The list goes on and on, that was just what’s wrong on the first paragraph of the first page, and I still have no idea what you do.
Again hire a professional to do the job, if you can’t afford a web designer at least hire somebody that has a good command of the English language to write the content for you.

Good luck,

Hi Ling and ElidS,

Thanks for the critiques and Elid, you are right. I need to re-write the first page. In this case, I would need an English native speaker to do that.

It was ok, but a bit lifeless.  And lifeless is bad image for your business.

For a business webiste, I`d prefer using a white background to bring the sense of cleanliness.  However, no matter what design colour schemes you pick, eventually it`s about what image you want your business to be portrayed - professional & conservative, professional & fun, etc. - it`s your call.

I`m not saying I`m an expert at this, but should you need help in designing your website, please send me a message.

Cheers!

 

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