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Hey guys I would love a web site review.  I punched it out myself.  Please check it out here at http://ionhomeinspection.com

Thank you in advance!

Jeffrey
Ion Home Inspection



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Jeffrey Owen
IonHomeInspection.com
KatyHomeInspection.com
Houston, Katy, Sugar Land, The Woodlands

OK, so to preface this, I have been known to be not-so-nice ...

I hate the Flash thing and the noise it makes on every page.
I think the page is too narrow.
On your front page, you do a lot of talking about you. I don`t care about you. I care about me. Tell me about me and why I need you, what value is in it for me. See Copywriting for more info.
I don`t get the key holder thing and the picture above it .. why is it there?
Why is fees in some sort of whitewashed imagery?
What is "the key to my success"? Drop the catch phrase ... just say "reference library".
Mostly I think your copy needs work ... it`s not very inviting, or crisp, or effective. It`s kind of all over the place. It definitely makes me want to click off pretty fast.

Yea. I agree to a certain extent.  I am not real keen on the flash either. They thing is in my industry and the guys I am competing with have terrible websites with no snap.  I get rave reviews from my clients on it due to that fact because people surf several before they call. The flash that is.  Is there a way to cache flash so that is does not load everytime.  Of course it is a little different when people are actually reading. Average site time is 6 minutes.


The Fees is just in test. I just put it out. Not sure if I want my prices out there yet. 

I am not so sure about the you vs me copy difference totally.  At least in my industry they are looking for me or someone like me.  It`s a professional resume almost.  I understand what you mean though I have fought with it back and forth. Maybe I need to contain it to just the credentials page or there abouts. 

The key is a must for Realtors.  Almost no one has one and some Realtors will not work with me other wise.

Thank you for your input!  Anything else you can think of would be appreciated.

Jeffrey in Houston




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Jeffrey Owen
IonHomeInspection.com
KatyHomeInspection.com
Houston, Katy, Sugar Land, The Woodlands

OK, so say your target market is a homeowner or potential homeowner. You vs me copy is this:

You / not good:
I am a home inspector and I do home inspections on the planet of Mars.

Me / is good:
You will save yourself thousands of dollars and tons of hassle by getting your home inspected by me before purchase.
(Worst copy ever but it`s 2:48 am!)

See? Follow that copywriting link above to see more examples.

I`m at a conference here in Accra, Ghana, waiting for the next speaker to step in. And I thought I should make a quick trip to SuN. And guess what ... I JUST EMBARRASSED MYSELF ... just by visiting your website!

Yeah, my speaker was waaaay up, but I was ONLY visiting a website, and didn`t expect to be greeted by such a loud sound

No, I`m NOT making this up. It really did happen, moments ago.

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Jeffrey,

  Here are few suggestions/opinions for you considering you are in Real Estate.

1. Reduce the speed of the flash animation and good not to have sound. If you like sound go for a soothing one.

2.The website doesnt resize the same in all resolutions. Try widening the content area. This will help you to add more information and look better.

3.Lighter the better. Uniformity lacks in the website.

Other wise your site looks good.  Hope this information helps.

Spending few bucks can make your website great. Good Luck.

Arun

 

Real Estate?

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"Simply Eco-Luxurious: Because your Pet deserves the Very Best"
Whiner and Diner Pet Accessories

ops....Sorry its home inspection............But reviews remains the same. :)

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"Simply Eco-Luxurious: Because your Pet deserves the Very Best"
Whiner and Diner Pet Accessories