First, on the guarantee. You should allow that to show as a link.
Otherwise, it`s just hanging there, not looking like it ought to be
clicked. Looking at it again, I see it`s part of the "home" navigation
button. I dunno...I get what you`re trying to do, but it looks a bit
simplistic. I`d tend to shy away from the "sub-titles" in the buttons,
unless you can get them to be pop-out menus. Otherwise it looks a bit
cheap.
Then, there`s a weird sort of contradiction going on. At the
top you say, "Our guarantee to you." Then, right below that, you say,
"Nothing is guaranteed." I`d at least have some sort of distinctive space or layout so that it doesn`t look odd.
On your home page, the title of the content (I agree with Nikole on the
page title) is "A New York City Real Estate Consulting Group." Is that
the name of your company? I`m guessing probably not. You either should
use the company name, or not have the title that way.
Last two bullets aren`t bolded or they`re in a different typeface, and
again, as Nikole said, an "If" pretty much requires a "Then."
I`d change the first paragraph:
While it is important to deal with
various city agencies related to your property or business, that
doesn`t necessarily mean you have to do it yourself. Generally
speaking, hiring a professional in the field tends to end up less
expensive and less time-consuming.
If your first initial is "M." that`s fine, but try not to use it
excepting in the banner at the top. Most people, at least in the
States, tend to think "Ben Reich." However, most Europeans may think
the M. stands for Mr. (monsieur). So you`d say, "With over a decade of
experience, Ben Reich has....etc..."
The navigation seems to be fine. It`s rather that the layout is a bit
hard on the eyes. Lots of words, not so much white space. Still, it`s
easy enough to understand what you`re doing.....I think.
Mostly, I think on your home page you should have a "call to action."
That means, "Hire me to do......what?" Yes, you have the "contact us,"
but that`s not enough. There should be "Ben does all this stuff. He can
save you bucks. Hire him and he`ll show you how."
Then, "Here`s how to hire Ben immediately." And then the stuff you`d need to get started.
CraigL2007-5-29 2:11:26