Hi Tami :-)
Your site has, what I think is a fairly common problem, where it
attempts to sell a professional service but does it too simplistically.
I don`t like to see too many questions in a lead-in page. It makes it
too much of a mystery. I get the idea...the fast survey, but it rarely
works. Here`s a possibly different way to say the same things (Use real
bullets or don`t use them at all.):
Do you feel smart and capable, but that you`re stuck at a point in your life?
- There are great talents inside of you! Sometimes, all it takes is a fresh eye to help you see your potential.
- Perhaps you have an initial vision of what you`d like your life to be. If you need help clarifying that vision, we can help!
- Many people wonder if there`s more to life than working and
sleeping. We can help bring your mind, body, and spirit into alignment.
A life coach can help you win at the game of life. They act as an
inspiration, a motivator, a source of optimism, and an objective
viewpoint. When you`re looking for a new perspective or a different
approach, a life coach can be just the thing.
This is off the top of my head, mostly to illustrate that you can
basically say the same thing without a whole bunch of bulleted
questions.
I think a key problem here is on your "About" page:
Why should I choose you as my Life Coach?
I am passionate about what I do. My philosophy is, it is all about you, the client.
First of all, your being passionate about what you do isn`t a
persuasive selling point that explains why someone should hire you.
Secondly, a philosophy isn`t a 1-liner that doesn`t define anything.
"It" what?
Don`t get me wrong; I know where you`re trying to go with this. :-) But
if you`re going to sell life coaching, you can`t really look at it as
if you`re a football coach or a fitness coach. That`s fine for sports
and building non-thinking muscles.
A human bean is a complex amalgamation of just what you said, with
"body" being only 33% of the equation. Setting aside how you`re going
to "coach" a mind, you`re going to have to define what you mean by
"spirit."
It`s not enough to just say you`re "into it," and that you`re "really good at this stuff," so "hire me." :-) Y`know?
You can lose the "Resources" page, and perhaps use it as a blog area.
If you generate a number of articles or entries that explain your
theory of life coaching, principles by which you intend to help people,
and so forth, those would be legitimate resources. For the moment,
perhaps call the tab, "Articles."
Overall, it`s an okay site, but I don`t see any real call to action
other than "Call me." I think you should have a query form, perhaps
designed as a short interview. THAT`s where you can ask the questions,
and get some actual answers beside "Yes."
By the way, "Life Coaching Tips" in blue on the home page, over a green background, is essentially invisible to many people.
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