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beachdi

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Nov 11, 2007 8:40 AM ET    Quote  Report Abuse
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Hi All,

I need help with my elevator pitch as people keep asking me, "What is a Saltychixcompany, What do you do"?   I appreciate any and all advice.  

1.  SaltyChixcompany is a beach inspired clothing and accessories company.  We mix fashion with fun in the sun.  

2.  Are you passionate about the beach? So are we.  SaltyChixcompany is a beach inspired clothing and accessories company.  We mix fashion with fun in the sun.  Let us help you bring home some of that breezy beach lifestyle!

3.  We are a beach loving and beach living lifestyle company.  Be Bold, Be Beautiful.    It is all about your `Beachitude`.

4.  Sassy, Classy, Sunny and Funny.

I have many many more little tag lines and such.  I am all over the place and need to stay focused.  I will be using this pitch when selling to local boutiques and shops, I assume in my marketing and PR, and for just generating interest.  

Thank you thank you and again, thanx.

Dianne

 

beachdi2007-11-28 20:12:51
CraigL

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Nov 11, 2007 2:22 PM ET    Quote  Report Abuse
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Hi Dianne :-) Congrats on the soon-to-happen grand opening!

How about approaching this differently. Too many people (in my view) somehow make a split in their mind regarding business and everything else. They understand their "regular life," but they turn a knob in their head and become overly formal when discussing business. So let`s look at this from a mental perspective.

Life`s supposed to be fun, and this business idea in particular is geared toward fun, right? Okay, so first, put yourself into a fun frame of mind---a free environment. I dunno, like maybe....the beach! :-) Yah...that`s the ticket!

You`re on a beach with your best friend and her (his?) new friend. Perhaps it`s a date, or some other opportunity to meet your friend`s friend. And you met them there, you all didn`t drive together in the car. They stroll up, toss down the blankets, chairs, cooler, etc., and get settled. Everyone goes in for a swim, comes back out, dries off, and opens up something cold to drink.

Your friend`s friend turns to you and says, "So Dianne, Jodie tells me you`re opening your business next week. How cool is that! What kind of thing are you doing?"

Now be honest: You wouldn`t suddenly stand up, become serious, and start speaking weird. You wouldn`t say, "Salty Chix is a beach-inspired clothing and accessories company." You`re not reciting in front of a classroom, or on report, right?

Nobody talks like that in real life! :-D

Instead, you`d maybe grin really big, take a sip of your drink, and start describing. "Well, it`s a type of clothing store, focused on beach things.

"I was looking for (something), once, and realized I was having a terrible time finding stuff for the beach all in one place. It seemed like it was either scattered all over the place in different stores, or out of stock, or it was just a few basic swim suits.

"What I wanted, was a store that was a sort of high-fashion boutique, but devoted to the beach. I wanted to focus on women, and have everything you`d want, all in one place, year-round. I wanted....."

I`m just making stuff up, here, but the point is to *first* lose yourself in your imagination, seeing yourself and being on the beach. Be there, talking with someone who has a connection to you, but who you only just met. Feel the sund, the sand, the wind, and hear the waves. Let yourself walk away from the formality of An Elevator Pitch, and stay "normal."

Maybe use a tape recorder: Talk about what you yourself were looking for, how you "discovered" a problem nobody was solving, and decided to solve it yourself. Why did you perceive it as a problem? How come nobody else was solving that problem? What were the top three characteristics of this problem you were having---how did you come to feel you were having the problem?

Although you may believe that asking *another* business for orders means you have to put on a formal suit, pull your hair back into a helmet, and wear horn-rim glasses, how would that sell the idea of The Beach, informality, and fun? See?

Other boutique owners are going to respond first to your passion, excitement, and your sense of fun. Secondly, and equally important, they`re going to immediately ask themselves (in their mind, while listening), "How does this affect me? Do I have this problem? Do my customers have this problem? Will this solve a problem I didn`t know I had, get me more customers, and help me sell more to the existing customers?"
GrillCharmer

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Nov 11, 2007 3:07 PM ET    Quote  Report Abuse
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Wonderful advice Craig as always
 
Hey Dianne!!!  Beachitude!!  BRILLIANT!  I can`t wait to see the website.  How is that coming??  I need to get some more stuff to match my fantastic Salty Chix belt.  Salty Chix isn`t a brand, it`s a way of life! 


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Leslie
Founder and President
Charmed Life Products LLC
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beachdi

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Nov 11, 2007 3:52 PM ET    Quote  Report Abuse
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Honestly,

I am tearing up over here, let me go get some kleenex.   ya`ll have such thoughful, honest, smart suggestions!   

Craig so true so true!  That is why I am having such a problem with my `pitch` and telling people what I am doing.  I was trying too sound too businessyyyyy, which I am not, Which is why in my old fortune 500 world I always proclaimed I was just there for my entertainment value.   I have to get more of my wild personality out there.   I am trying to convey how I want my products to be all about a feeling, the fun you have when you are at the beach.  The passion you feel for it.  Hence the reason I actually broke up with guy who wouldn`t move to the beach.   shhhhh, don`t tell anybody, that sounds kinda mean.    I meet people from all over the world at our lil ol beach.   And I am always amazed at how much they love my part of the ocean.   I want them to bring that passionate fun loving feeling home with them.    And they can display their love of the beach when wearing a Salty Chix tshirt, or shell belt.   My lawyer girlfriend gets stressed when prosecuting cases,so she will just rub on her shell bracelet and remind herself that the ocean is fluid and silky, the salt air is calming, and the sun is warm... and she can make it thru another courtroom case. 

Leslie - I love Salty Chix isn`t just a brand, it is a way of life.   A passion. 

Kathy- no I am not shy.   But this business, building a brand has left me tongue twisted.  I can feel it, this company is me, but I am having a hard time conveying it.   

Some people thought I was going to sell potato chips.   ha ha but that could be in the future.  

okey dokey, back to the thinking board. All of the above is a novel.                   I am still waiting for CookieMonster and CampSteve opinions.... 

Salty Chix Dianne

CraigL

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Nov 12, 2007 2:28 AM ET    Quote  Report Abuse
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Kathy and I were talking about this thread, and I got to remembering back to where I learned about so-called elevator pitches. My father was a business exec, and we lived in a town where most of the men (not so many women back then) were also heavy-hitters in business.

By the time I got to be about 15, I`d be out and about, alone or with my folks, and we`d encounter people. They`d be friends of my dad`s, in this context, and I`d be tagging along. One place would be at the marina, where we`d be getting ready to go sailing, or coming back and stowing the boat.

There`d be someone else doing something boat-ish, and they`d say hi, like you do. My father and this other fella would get to talking, and it was about life, business, things, and stuff. As I got older, they`d turn to me to include me in the converstation.

"So, what`ve you been up to?" That`d be a typical question. It could be at the marina, a party, a barbeque, at a school function, or anywhere.

The thing is, because of the type of town and the interests of the people in that town, nobody really wanted to hear "nuthin`," or "I dunno." Kids were expected to have a life plan, goals, ideas, and a sense of the world. By 13 we were supposed to know something about what we intended to do with our lives, and be actively working on how to get it done.

People talk about a "good ol` boy" network, or "old money," or other social advantages various backgrounds offer. But what it comes down to is a combination of expectations and being able to back those expectations with real action, money, intent, and clout.

An elevator pitch is an informal happenstance, where you meet someone who may be able to assist you in your business goals. But you`re meeting them in a context where they`re not thinking formal business. What you`re trying to do is be comfortable and informal, but "keep your eye on the ball," so to speak.

Specifically, Dianne, it`s a shame that you spent so much time in the wrong type of business environment. It sounds to me like a bunch of low-end manager wannabees who don`t understand the world of money, finance, and power. So they`re stiff, rigid, humorless, and boring.

Try to get away from all that nonsense. :-) Rich people mostly try to have fun. They don`t have all that much of an opportunity, with everyone around them kow-towing and being sycophants. But they put their pants on one leg at a time, just like anyone else.

It`s why I`m suggesting building an attitude of imagination. Setting the scene on the world of "your" part of the ocean. The words will just flow naturally from there. It`s when you try to pre-decide key words, hot phrases, and slogans that you`ll end up sounding flat. Y`know?

Keep your goal in mind. That`s easy from someone with a passion, but very hard for someone who`s intellectually trying to sustain an interest. When you know where you want to go, everything you do and say will be focused on that destination. The "elevator pitch" will come naturally at that point.
beachdi

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Nov 12, 2007 3:07 PM ET    Quote  Report Abuse
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Dear Craig-

You nailed it.   So correct.   When people meet me and I talk about the business my passion does shine through and it is more of a natural flow.   Thank God I had this advice, as TODAY I had to discuss my business with an advertising sales rep for a regional type free newspaper whose demographic is females.   it is called Skirt! (how cute is that) She sounded young and she lives in the beach town up the road from me.   So I just naturally started talking to her as a friend, explained my ideas for my company.   She gave me the advertising rates etc., but only after she had more questions about my company and products and website launch date etc. 

This conversation flowed much more smoothly because I had read all of the advice from my SUN buddies.    I did not try and use a `canned line` on her or something I had memorized.    Last week I would have tried that and I would have sounded silly and unsure of myself.   

How did I do this-

I just pretended we were sitting on the beach, drinking, hanging out and she asked me what I do for a living.    Just like Craig suggested, it was all in my imagination, I could even feel the salty breeze.   It worked and I did not feel nervous or `goofy`

soooo, I am not worried about this anymore...I can move onto my next set of worries and concerns and task to do.

See ya in the next post.

Big hugs and kisses to all who helped me. (just a peck on the cheek, no worries ha ha ha )

CraigL

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Nov 13, 2007 12:31 AM ET    Quote  Report Abuse
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I don`t usually recommend living life by feelings, but in some cases it`s the best way. In particular, if you find yourself doing something and feeling restricted, frustrated, and as if you`re acting a part, you`re probably doing the wrong thing.

When the words flow, you feel good, and your confidence grows in the situation, you`re almost always doing the right thing. :-) Sounds like you`re finding your "voice."
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