I really like the color scheme and layout. That`s likely because it was
designed by an artistic person and put out as a template. Still, if you
decide to go with something else, see if you can replicate the current
look. It`s really nice, in my own opinion.
The problem is both the content and the organization of that content.
:-) Which is ironic, considering that you`re an organizer in the
physical, material world. It goes to show that organizing abstractions
isn`t the same. LOL! (Hey...as a philosopher, that`s some kinda humor
Anyway...back to the subject. What I see is the redundancy of having as
your very first contact with me, "Welcome to One Organized Life." First
of all, I`m already on the page, so I don`t necessarily need to be
welcomed. I chose to get there, you`re an open site, I assume I`m
Additionally, there`s an interesting ambiguity in the title. It`s like
saying, "Man, that`s One Big-Ass Fish!" :-) In other words, I tend to
interpret the title as being a blog title where you`re saying, "Welcome
to my life. I`m one helluva organized person, and what you`re going to
read about is this one`s organized life."
To fix it, I`d just remove the first line completely, and move this (edited) paragraph up to the top:
Sometimes being disorganized is due to
a life change, major life events, or stress. Other times it`s a year or
two (or five!) of stuff that`s piled up. Being disorganized also can be
the result of a psychological issue like chronic disorganization. Now
you can do something about it!
Then use the points you`re using, but turn them into bullets:
- Is your office a mess?
- Is your filing system a disaster - or nonexistent?
- Need help downsizing?
- Want to simplify your life?
- Are you preparing for a move?
- Want to get your place in shape before that special get-together?
Finally, pull it together:
We`ll help you get rid of clutter, get
organized, and feel more comfortable in you space! Whether it`s your
home, your office, the car, or even just your purse, no project is too
big or too small!
We`ve worked with actors, students, writers, moms, dads, business
owners, newlyweds, and new parents---people from all walks of life who
need help and are ready for a change. Bring the balance, harmony, peace
of mind, and happiness back into your life: Get organized!
Your tagline is great, and works perfectly with the company name. What
I`d do is to stay consistent with "we" and not so much of the "me." It
makes life easier when you have an "About Us
" page, and won`t give you trouble when you start hiring employees---Organizators! :-D
(made that word up....)
I`d also put some kind of content into the About Us page....any kind of
content. There`s something very annoying (and unprofessional) about
clicking a link and going to a page that says "Under construction." It
tells me the site isn`t.....organized.
All in all, you could likely continue to use Office Live (I really
dislike anything by Yahoo!, given our past experiences), but I`d try to
change your font. It`s coming across on my system as Tahoma, which is
pretty hard to read. Keep it either Verdana or Helvetica-Arial.
You might also want to take a look at Nvu
from the Mozilla people. It`s very powerful, easy to learn, and can
give you all the control you`d like. However, it doesn`t give you the
automated scripts and extras you get from a template.