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I am no expert, but here is what I see.

You use far too many negatives in your text: "Brands are not just for big companies", " First I will tell you what graphic design is not", "More information on why I don` t provide", "there is not a set price list"....

You should turn every one of the negative terms to positive ones: "Brand your business like the big corporations".  List the benefits of graphic design, not the definitions.  Turn the "free concepts" into: "Other designers may offer `cookie-cutter` concepts for free but ours is a concept portfolio custom designed for your business, and there is a small fee for that service."

There is no price list but you say that you are competitive.  You provide little basis for that claim.  I like to see *some* pricing indications in a web site because my experience is that when there is NO price guidelines on a web site, it usually means that I can`t afford the services.  Can you say something like: "Prices start at $xxx for a logo design for business card and letterhead use."

Last, at the bottom of the first verbose page, you break in mid-sentence with a [more] button, and then you don`t finish the sentence.

Did I say verbose?  Isn`t the first unwritten rule of graphics design: "whitespace is good"?




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Steve Mann
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Thank  you  for your comments.

I`m usually the last person to suggest a "pretty looking site", but for graphic design, I`d expect to see a little more flair and elegance on sites who proclaim to be in the graphics media business.

The person most likely coming to your site is wanting something that gives them a `great look` and would expect to see more from you on the creative side -- not the simple side. Your rationale may make complete sense to you, but probably not to your `target audience`.

I do understand your goal for trying to keep it simple, but could it be elegant and simple at the same time

I would at least test the `simple` concept you`re attempting to do now against a more `elegant` looking site and let the "conversions" determine what is right for your site. We can try and figure it out ourselves, and you`ll probably get 50 different answers from 50 different people...but through testing, your sales/leads will indicate to you what works best.

Good Luck!
Cartess

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I`d suggest using correct, concise grammar.  For instance, this sentence in particular is difficult to read due to improper comma use and wordiness:  "In the times that we are living, where there are many good competitors you can’t afford not to use the services of a good reliable, customer oriented graphic designer."

If a professional is outside your budget, perhaps you have a friend who studied English in college who can look at your site.  You can also visit the classic grammar book The Elements of Style for free online at http://www.bartleby.com/141/

thank you for all your comments.

hi,

I think it looks plain. I`m looking for a designer and as a customer it does not grab my attention. Maybe more color or graphics. I`m sure you do great work, but it was hard to tell by the site.

aaron

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Aaron Burnett Owner of We Work You Play

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