You`re off to a great start already...I`d trust your gut and push forward.
No one can tell you which sentence will work and which one won`t work. You`ll only find the answers by testing. Marketing is all about testing, no one has all the answers and if they lead you to believe they do, RUN!
You can split test your homepage and that will allow you to see which one people are responding too...For the next 60-90 days, you should just be testing and modify the site/content accordingly.
Based on `real world` experience, you`d get more response by starting with a `benefit oriented headline`. In other words, you don`t have to make the company name the primary thing they see once entering the site...it can be the first thing, but it doesn`t have to overwhelmingly standout...
The only thing prospects really care about is `what`s in it for me?`
Answer that question immediately and to their satisfaction and you`re halfway there.
The example I threw up was something I literally threw up in less than 5 minutes. A lot of thought didn`t go into it, so some things are probably off...I just wanted to present you with another perspective and that was to talk from the angle of `benefits for the prospect`. Tell them whats in it for them...most people make mistakes by talking about `how great their companies are`, `how many awards they`ve won`, and `how they plan to change the world`, and the truth of the matter is that most prospects could care less. It`s all about them, not me or you
My final piece of advice...TEST, TEST and TEST SOME MORE...
Let the results dictate what direction you go in.
There are scripts available that will allow you to split-test your homepage and your webmaster should be able to assist you with setting that up...testing is the best thing you can do because one change can literally change your entire business.
EXAMPLE (short version of the story below)
2 boys in college bought into a pizza business that was already losing money. One of the brothers decided to get out (the other bought him out).
After trying to figure out a different angle to make this business profitable, he finally created a USP (Unique Selling Proposition)...in other words, what makes your pizza shop so different from the other pizza shops and why should I spend money with yours...
He answered that question with:
FRESH, HOT PIZZA DELIVERED IN 30 MINUTES OR LESS OR IT`S FREE!
I don`t even have to tell you the name of this company do I?
That USP literally rocked the pizza industry overnight.
While you and your business partner are putting thoughts together, think about your Unique Selling Proposition. What makes your Staging services so unique? Why choose you over the competition? What unique benefits does your service provide? How does the customer benefit? Do you have a guarantee? How strong is your guarantee?
If your guarantee is weak, or worse, if you don`t have one...why should the customer take the risk? If your service is as great as you say it is, back it up? Strong guarantees also increase response? If you`re willing to take the risk and stand by your product, you`ll have that extra edge that the competition doesn`t have....display your guarantees in your advertising/marketing pieces (website too).
Remember....TEST EVERYTHING....No one knows all of the answers and even if they`re absolutely sure they now the answer...test it anyway (and run from them).
Also....the page I threw up was replicated and put on my server (I didn`t modify your existing website at all...I`m not smart enough to know how to do that yet ). But there was no breach on your site, it was all dumped on the backend of mine...