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LiveWise

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Dec 01, 2007 10:21 PM ET Quote Report Abuse

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I`ve found something that will not only benefit me and my family, but also my community. More will be added and this is just the beginning. I want to make the value so great that it is a "No brainer" to get books, CDs, and DVDs from my site. What do you think? Between getting free books and giving back to charities, is there anything else I should do? Would you change anything?

Natalie

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Businesswithcents

posts: 21

Dec 02, 2007 1:44 AM ET Quote Report Abuse

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Hi LiveWise-

Unfortunately I am not a website expert, however I will give you feedback on what I liked about your website as an outsider. Not sure if other book sellers do the same, but I loved the fact that you have an option to download a free book. I think that will draw attention to your website, and I like that fact that it is a classic such as Huck Finn. I also like that you review, and recommend a few books on the right hand side of the page. It is a great personal touch. Sorry I can`t review the website and give you better advice, but it`s always nice to hear the positives. I wish you the best of luck.

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Anthony LeGree

President of Basset Communications
Host of the Business with Cents Show

CampSteve

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Dec 02, 2007 2:52 AM ET Quote Report Abuse

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The site looks good and I also like the aspects that Anthony mentioned above. Those stood out to me as well.

However, upon visiting the main page... I don`t get it. Your message is not clear. It is obvious you are doing something different with selling books (and other media) but I couldn`t understand what that is. There`s the line about getting books from a local, corner bookstore run by friends - but it`s a web store. Huh? Then there are links about having your own bookstore and becoming published. And then there`s the whole `percentage goes to charity` thing.

Those are all fine elements of a web business but with all these conflicting messages, I was just confused. Does this source my local bookstores? Is it a publishing company? Is it a franchise? With your personal presence on the site, how are you involved in all this?

I just think you need one clear message like `We sell books and give back.` Then you can also mention some of the other things you offer. But as it stands, trying to shout ALL of your messages at once just leaves things a bit confusing. Don`t get me wrong, it`s not like I`m actually confused by the site. I was confused about why I would buy through you, what value I get out of it. I hope that makes sense.

CraigL

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Dec 02, 2007 2:15 PM ET Quote Report Abuse

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Here`s a link to the site: http://www.mybookwise.com/LiveWise/

I`ll go along with Steve. I didn`t see anything specific that tells me what`s going on. I clicked the "Bookwise" link, and saw only a menu along the side, and a big blank area in the middle. (Windows 98SE, Firefox 1.x, DSL)

Ah...Very Interesting!! When I clicked the above link, I wanted to go back to where I started. So I clickd "Home." At that point I returned to a very different page from where I started! So I`ll assume you`re using a landing page that has nothing much to do with the actual home page? Not a good idea, if that`s the case.

Here`s where I saw "What is Bookwise?" That should be on the first page where someone arrives. Additionally, we`ve had a lot of discussion about audio on the web. Not everyone likes it (I hate it, personally). As such, since I would click away from the site right away, you should give people the *option* of learning about Bookwise by audio OR by reading.

Additionally, the presentation still didn`t explain to my satisfaction what`s Bookwise other than it`s some sort of MLM or Franchise or other way to run a business from home.

All in all, it`s a confusing site. I`m not sure how well it presents itself, although I do understand the underlying wish to increase reading in America. I just wonder if it`s possible at this late date.

CampSteve

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Dec 02, 2007 3:45 PM ET Quote Report Abuse

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I didn`t even see earlier the page that the `home` button brings you to. When I go there, I feel like I`m an a different site, not the Natalie one. I realize that this is the BookWise main page and not your site but this navigation is a good way to accidentally send customers out of your store, and confuse them. I`m probably more web savvy than the common user and because this is a critique, I`m looking for these specifics. I think many people would just get lost.

Fortunately, redirecting links is easy to fix! :)

smartbusiness1998

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Dec 03, 2007 6:30 PM ET Quote Report Abuse

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Hi Natalie!

I like your website! Where did you design it? I`m looking for someone to make a webiste for me.

Thanks!

LiveWise

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Dec 04, 2007 12:39 AM ET Quote Report Abuse

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Thanks for your feedback. I really appreciate it. I will try to make the changes. There were also a few little bugs that I don`t think are present anymore as far as pressing to the home page. When you are involved in it and know it inside and out, it`s nice to have an outside opinion that doesn`t understand it to test it out. THANKS!!!

Natalie

prioritysystems

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Dec 05, 2007 4:03 AM ET Quote Report Abuse

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Hello Natalie!

We can do your website with a brand new webdesign with the self management system, that provides fastest, safest and easiest way to manage your website.

If you have any questions, please let us know at info@thepriority.net

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Vali Zairov
Priority Systems, Inc.(http://www.thepriority.net) - Professional Websites with affordable prices.

Casalbordino

posts: 7

Dec 11, 2007 3:40 PM ET Quote Report Abuse

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I would like my website reviewed, please. I have had one customer in 6 months.

www.elisascustomcreations.com

prioritysystems

posts: 3

Dec 11, 2007 4:54 PM ET Quote Report Abuse

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I would like my website reviewed, please. I have had one customer in 6 months.

www.elisascustomcreations.com

I can see why is that.

1. the design of the website doesn`t help users

2. it looks amateur

3. html coding has a lot of mistakes-i.e. 4 <body> tags, it should have only 1

4. the pagerank of the website is 0, means noone can ever find your website through google search

This is just a five minute impression I got from your website :)

Of course we can change this sad situation :)

E-mail me if you need a help - info@thepriority.net

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Vali Zairov
Priority Systems, Inc.(http://www.thepriority.net) - Professional Websites with affordable prices.

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