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She is an older lady, recently widowed,  starting a new career and wanting to teach for the learning annex.  I need a hook to start her course description.  Please can anyone help me with one.  Here is the letter she sent them describing what she does.

Dear...............,

Joe Nunziata, from whom I take many Learning Annex
classes, knows of my work, and has suggested that I
contact you about running a workshop/class.

As an on-going student at the Learning Annex, I am very
familiar with your format, and I feel that this workshop
would fill a gap as well as complement your personal
development classes.

People have a tremendous need in their lives to look
strong and project a dynamic and magnetic image . . . as
peers, employers and clients judge others` worth on
their vitality and physical appearance.

The workshop is meant specifically to empower the many
people who lead a sedentary life, sitting at desks for
hours on end, which results in everyone looking and
feeling weak and tired.

I help people develop and re-discover their personal
power through a special series of exercises based on a
fusion of modern dance and bio-mechanics. They go home
with a set of tools that they can use to help them
overcome fatigue and re-charge thenselves for all their
life`s activities.

Dear ..........

I would like to propose a course for the Learning Annex, focused on using dance and exercise to create a strong sense of presence. Classes would be for those people who work behind a desk, spend little time in physical activities, and as a result, have lost touch with their own confidence and assertiveness.
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As an on-going student at the Learning Annex, I am very
familiar with your format, and I feel that this workshop
would fill a gap as well as complement your personal
development classes.

My intent is to help people develop and re-discover their personal
power through a special series of exercises based on a
fusion of modern dance and bio-mechanics. They go home
with a set of tools that they can use to help them
overcome fatigue and re-charge thenselves for all their
life`s activities.

The workshop is meant specifically to empower the many
people who lead a sedentary life, sitting at desks for
hours on end, which results in everyone looking and
feeling weak and tired.

Thank You.  It is the jist of what I had in mind to write.  This puts it together nicely.