Well first before I would have put it up on youtube and promoted the heck out of my web site I would have made sure my web site was built and ready. Second, and I don`t mean this in a bad way but it realy dosnt grab me. First you come walking in and adjust the mouse, there is a laptop in the way whith a key board in the way. It looks like you are having to scrunch down to be in the camera lens. Just my thoughts.
I agree - you need a more upbeat - energetic "sell" - this makes me sleepy - get a shot of someone working online - running a small business, etc - not just a talking head - you can get some good video cheap online at stock sites to make it more visually appealing -