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enviro

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Mar 02, 2009 4:08 AM ET Quote Report Abuse

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This is a new company and its website that I created. It is all my design, which took a few days to complete. I am still constantly tweaking it:

www.envirodetox.com

My main goal is to have a site that answers any questions any potential customers might have and does it guide that customer to contacting me?

Please let me know what you think and I am open to anything, so don`t pull any punches.

Thanks very much,

Phillip

Webline

posts: 687

Mar 03, 2009 6:41 AM ET Quote Report Abuse

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Overall the message is ok. Maybe tell just what the process involves or how it works; I don`t get if this is a chemical you spray in the air, a sweeping/wiping system, etc., or what exactly is going to happen when you do this until I go to "Green Clean", which isn`t the most obvious way to get me to this information.

IE wants to install a Media Player extension. Either my IE needs updated, or you want to run something that I may not want to go along with. This doesn`t happen in Firefox, but looking at your code I get the feeling there is a script that you want to run.

The Yahoo coding is bloated, inefficient and terrible, and could probably be cut in half with proper code. It`s not something you can control, it`s the evil nature of site builders to do this. In W3C, there are 200+ errors on the main page. Not good.

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Loren

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Mar 03, 2009 7:10 PM ET Quote Report Abuse

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You copy approach is dull, overly technical, doesn`t

emphasize FEAR OF DISEASE which it should first

and foremost. Your writer seems to assume people

want a scrupulously clean environment and are seaching

for a vendor to do it for them - only a half-accurate

assumption.

This is exactly the kind of website a lot of businesses

pay large dollars for and it generates no leads or

business. While a source of pride you can say

"we have a website" about, I wouldn`t expect it to

generate much sales response the way you have it

set up. No call-to-action.

banzaibert

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Mar 03, 2009 11:56 PM ET Quote Report Abuse

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Love the site, looks very professional and very clean. I did not have any unanswered questions... seems to me your contents are complete. Nice work!

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enviro

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Mar 04, 2009 1:35 AM ET Quote Report Abuse

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Webline - Yeah I used Yahoo sitebuilder and I know any web designer could do much better, but like I said I am new and it fit my "no money" budget. If I am even a little successful then I will probably upgrade to a smoother, better coded site.

I will work on my message focus too.

Thank you

enviro

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Mar 04, 2009 1:39 AM ET Quote Report Abuse

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Loren - thank you for your input - when I was putting this all together I knew I was boring myself a little. Believe it or not I cut out a lot of stuff, so I will try to emphasize fear of disease more and work on the call to action, which brings me to a question:

Other than putting my phone number on every page and asking to call me -

What are good "calls to action"?

On the positive side I did not spend a lot of money on this site - so thank you for the round about compliment.

Again thank you for your input - much welcomed

Phillip

enviro

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Mar 04, 2009 1:46 AM ET Quote Report Abuse

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Banzaibert - thank you very much - I wrote, composed and designed everything so I do appreciate the pat on the back

However every criticism just makes my site better - so everything and anything is truly welcomed...Please everyone continue

Phillip

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