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I made some of the recommended changes to my site please critique it again. All of you are so helpful.

 

Thank You

Aaron

 

www.weworkyouplay.net

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Aaron Burnett Owner of We Work You Play

Errand Service
Errand Service Blog

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Steve Mann
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MannMade Digital Video
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i like it alot more! its to the point and leaves little to user to try and figure out. i would make a few small changes listed below:

1 - change your font on the tag line - "we work you play" - its doesn`t pop - its a great line and you need to make it visible -

2 - on the upper right you have your phone number and description : errand running service" while i like it there - i think you should either move it to the center / lower middle of the site and again make the description more visible, change the color/font.

3 - it seems to have a feminine flair to it, colors ect... i would change that to more neutrals

over all i like it and i think you have a great idea!

jeff

 

 

 

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Jeff Kilgore

"Your life is designed to give you the results that you are getting"

Founder - Madnonnie.com

"It`s Like A Whole `Nother Internet"

what colors do you think would work?

aaron

 

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Aaron Burnett Owner of We Work You Play

Errand Service
Errand Service Blog

aaron, i am not a graphics person in the least, only an end user with a little experience in the internet world. that was my opinion and others may disagree. that being said,  i would pose the question the group and go with the consensus. as a unbiased consumer i think you should make the colors a little more neutral. i always go to the top sites for direction, startupnation for instance, orange red blue green ect... you don`t want to go with the browns because it will kill the pop that you are trying to achieve - maybe even go with some crazy colors what ever just make it pop - you are on the right track, jeff

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Jeff Kilgore

"Your life is designed to give you the results that you are getting"

Founder - Madnonnie.com

"It`s Like A Whole `Nother Internet"

THANK YOU

AARON

 

 

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Aaron Burnett Owner of We Work You Play

Errand Service
Errand Service Blog

My problem with the colors isn`t so much the feminine slant, rather that that pink is so intense, way too saturated, especially as a background color in the lower-left box.

Let me ask this, what gender is more responsible for booking your services from a household?  If women, then I say pinks and purples are just fine!  Or for example, if you want more men to sign up, then think about varying your colors.

Also, some of the photos are squashed in the slideshow of images.  That is pretty amateur looking, in my opinion.  You should keep photos at their normal ratio.  Regardless, I like it better than the shoe.

I like it a lot better, but I don`t like the slow fade in the slide show. As I tried to read the first paragraph, my eye kept getting pulled to the worrisome change taking place in my peripheral vision. So I couldn`t tell you right now, without looking at it, WHAT you said in the first paragraph.

If you must keep the slide show, make your transitions instant. I don`t much see the point of the slide show at all, though, since it told me nothing.

I really like the new navigation! I totally love the "Us," "You" pictures! LOL! Great humor without being too blatant, and immediately gets the point across. Super!

I also like being able to quickly jump to different services, and to see the dollar amount right there. The only problem is I have no readily evident way to know what page I`m on, and which set of services I`m looking at. Title would help, not only on each page, but in the Window titles.

I`d also like to click on your logo to get back to the home page.

In your Testimonials, since they`re not text, search engines will never read them. You may want to consider how that`ll affect your future advertising and word of mouth.

All in all, though I don`t much care for the hot pink, it didn`t bother me all that much. I was a bit bored with a plain white background, but could live with that too, particularly as it makes it easy to get those "us-them" images to jump out at me. :-)

I think the main thing, right now that needs fixing, is a clear Rates page. I do like the Services/Rates tab, but I`d like to also see a single, consolidated, no-nonsense rate sheet.

For example, suppose I want to buy your services for my aging mom. I couldn`t figure out (quickly) how to accomplish that.

I took another look at the site.  Is the whole site a single flash file?  This is not good for many reasons.  You won`t have a site index and though technology is beginning to be able to search through flash files, it isn`t the best thing for SEO.

And for me, I had a problem navigating the site because I use the back and forward buttons on my mouse (same as back and forward buttons in the browser).  Because the pages aren`t actually different web pages with differing URLs, it is not friendly to the various ways people navigate a website.  One is forced to do it your way.  I found that annoying.

I don`t know enough about the technical aspects of web development to suggest how you need to change this but I really think you need to rebuild the site in a more acceptable format.

Otherwise, I think you are making some great improvements.  It certainly is easier to read and understand what you offer.  Great job!

I think that I mentioned before, a page that is all flash is unsearchable, thus the search engines will never find you.  Also, some spam blocking software thinks that a page that is all flash (or all one image file) is spam.

I am curious, though.  Why all flash?

Overall, your improvements have made a tremendous difference in the quality of the site.  Like Craig, I don`t see the point of the slide show.  I suspect that the people who use your service will not be doing it to allow more time to party.  It`s going to be the busy executive who can`t leave the office but he absolutely needs his suit from the cleaners tomorrow morning.  It`s going to be the housewife who has ten things on the plate and remembers the dog`s grooming appointment.

One thing that`s seriously missing from your home page is - where are you?  Maybe the "Serving Broward and Palm Beach counties in Central Florida." should go with the phone number.  I shouldn`t have to go to the "Contact Us" page to find out that you aren`t even in my state.  (This is a common mistake).

Steve Mann



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Steve Mann
Internet Videographer
MannMade Digital Video
My Email