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www.gofericecream.com we are going to be updating it for content and I wanted some other people to give suggestions.

Thanks so much,

 Your friends from Gofer Ice Cream

 

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Jay,

I visited your site and overall, I really like it.  I agree with the above feedback in regards to the paragraphs being a little too long.  When rewriting the content, I would look at describing the delicious tasty treats and emphasizing how your customers will feel and enjoy your ice cream.  Currently, you refer to your ice cream as "our product".  I would take a look at addressing the senses that enjoying ice cream on a hot day invokes.

You might also take a look at splitting up the products page into smaller bits.  Maybe utilizing a picture representing each type of ice cream (hard, soft, razzies, lite, etc).  From a user standpoint, one might not want to scroll the entire page to see the different kinds of ice cream that you have.

I`m no expert in web content, but I love ice cream and ultimately your site should make your visitors` mouths water and desire to come buy it from you.  All the variations are great, but make me want it first, then tell me why yours is the best.

Good luck!