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Hello Startup Nation,

I am looking for a critique of a RFP Response Cover Letter template. (The JMJ initials are being used as a placeholder).

 

Sincerely,

Jackie

 

Complementary and Personal

Dear Mrs. Valued Customer:

Enclosed is the proposal I promised you, titled: Virtual Office Administration

I also want to take this opportunity to thank you for all your help. Designing a suitable solution for Valued Customer, Inc required that I become familiar with your products and your industry. Since I didn’t have much background in your industry, this represented a challenge. As a result, your help and guidance proved to be invaluable. Indeed, because of your tutelage, I was able to build a solution from a position of knowledge. Ultimately, this resulted in a better, more cost effective solution for your organization.

I will call you next week to discuss this proposal. As always, please don’t hesitate to call me if you have questions or if I can be of further assistance.

I hope we can continue working together into the future.

Sincerely,

JMJ, Owner

E-Works Consulting of Michigan

 

Formal and Personal

 Dear Mr. Valued Customer:

 I enjoyed speaking with you about your proposal project. 

Attached is the proposal that describes our administration services.  Virtual Office Administrative services are well suited to organizations, like Valued Customer stores, who need office administrative support at a reasonable price. It is also ideal for organizations who want to implement short-term projects, without overburdening the office staff with additional work.

I look forward to working with you on this worthwhile project. I will contact you in a couple days to answer any questions you may have. In the meantime, please do not hesitate to call me if I can be of further assistance. I can be reached at 313-759-8919.

Sincerely,

 

JMJ, Owner

E-Works Consulting of Michigan

 

 

Hi LadyJMJ1

I've rewritten one of your cover letters just to give you a different prospective on the letter.  If you would like to communicate further, you may contact me at culshaw@spcfreelance.com.  Also, the funny little symbol about half way through the letter are suppose to be indented bulleted points. 

Good morning Mr. Valued Customer:

I am following up on our July 3rd conversation in reference to your project.  I would like to help you with this project and have attached a brief proposal for your review.

Virtual Office Administrative Services is also well suited to assist organizations like yours. We can provide your organization the following type of support:

 Office administrative support at a reasonable price.
 Assist with short-term projects.
 Take on some of the workload of an already overburdened office staff.

I will contact you next Thursday to discuss my proposal and answer any questions you may have. In the meantime, please do not hesitate to call me if I can be of further assistance. I can be reached at 313-759-8919 or via email at XXXXX@XXXXXXX.net.

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The older we get, the more excuses we make for not chasing after our dreams. But truth is, goals are attainable at any age.

Thank you S. P. Culshaw....as you can see I'm a little lost in the startup "sauce" LOL/

 

Regards,

Jackie

Hi,

Thanks very much for this comment. It help me to think about my ideals.

Tks again and pls keep posting.

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This link below can show more info, you can find them at: Cover letter sample

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