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let me introduce myself to the forum. Starting to work from home and on the web. looking for all the help needed to run a succuessfull business online. I do have two web sites  just looking for some feed back take a look. let me know what you think.
notarybusiness.net and bushfinancialsolutions.com

Hi there :-)
I looked at "notarybusiness.net," and that site needs a lot of work on the writing. Frankly, it`s horrible. Then I stepped over to the Bush Financial site, and saw that the writing was equally horrible.

At least in the Bush site you have a call to action, capture potential client information, and then go from there with whatever it is you offer. But the notary business is far too confused and quickly takes someone off to mysterious other sites.

On a quick look, I`d hire a copywriter to revise both sites` content. Beyond that, I won`t get into the code and underlying issues.