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katt33

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Mar 30, 2007 3:04 PM ET    Quote  Report Abuse
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No Animal Byproducts, No Toxins Beauty Products, Patented and Directly Shipped !!!
katt332007-3-31 14:46:4
nhgnikole

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Mar 30, 2007 4:22 PM ET    Quote  Report Abuse
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I was thinking about this with another person`s site lately ...


the words "drop ship" (or "shipped" or "shipping") means nothing to the consumer, only to the business owner.

Perhaps something better would be "shipped direct" like "Shipped direct to your home or office!" At least the end-user would make more sense out of it.
CraigL

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Mar 31, 2007 3:39 AM ET    Quote  Report Abuse
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Never use "almost" in a tagline or pitch. It immediately brings to mind "not good enough."
katt33

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Mar 31, 2007 1:46 PM ET    Quote  Report Abuse
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Thank You for the feedback, changed it.
LifeTranscender

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Apr 01, 2007 10:43 PM ET    Quote  Report Abuse
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Katherine,

It appears you pass the the Brian Tracy
test.

It`s makes me ask: What is it?

Continue to make this an Awesome day!

Lighting 1,000 Dreams,
C.F. Jackson


 

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