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I like the idea. I`m only here for the food, after all, and it`s SUCH a problem trying to keep track of the various steaks. :-) The above is just my thinking, free for you to use if you want, in any portion or all of it. I`m glad you like the suggestions, though.

Read this article I wrote about copywriting.

Thanks CookieMonster!  I`ll most certainly read that when I have a sec.  Thank you!

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Leslie
Founder and President
Charmed Life Products LLC
Grill Charms™… The MUST HAVE grilling accessory that is revolutionizing the American Cook-out AND The perfect gift for any occasion!
Grill Charms
                                                                                                    

A couple of things - overall, I think it`s good, and it might just be me, but when I first read it I assumed the GC branded your food, rather than something that stays in the food. Does that make sense? I think that right at the top of the page you should have a photo of the GC in action. Is it just me or do you have a picture of a cooked steak with no GC? Definitely I would show the product in use first thing.

And I agree with whoever said it might not be the best idea to compare your product to wine charms - I know what they are, but they`re not the most common household item, so I wouldn`t recommend having your reader`s mind immediately going to something they might have to stop and think about (or google). Basically GC are a "name tag" for your food - probably you can think of a better way to put it, but that`s more descriptive to me and as a reader I don`t have to think one second about what that is or how it applies in this context.

Lastly, I would recommend making GC that say "rare," "medium," "well-done," etc. You can even have a more colloquial version that say "bloody," "scorched," etc. Or maybe that sounds too gruesome! I do think it would be helpful, so the diner doesn`t necessarily have to remember which charm they selected, and if you were in a large party situation where it might not be conducive to have people select a charm, but they`d still want to know how something is cooked before they eat it.

Hope that`s coherent! Best of luck to you!

Leslie,
I`m sorry I won`t be of any help critiquing your site as I am only a beginner as well.  (I will be submitting my site soon for advice from all the smart people).  Anyway, I am familiar with "Grill Charms", (from the QVC/Oprah forum) and I think they are a terrific idea.  Do you have a retail price yet?  Got to plan and budget for the future, (Christmas, birthdays, myself, etc).

Good luck with your terrific idea.

Greg

Hello there TheBagHitch!  Yes, I complete agree with and I do plan on having "The Steak Collection" as that is the only meat that warrants the rare etc...  I plan on launching 2 new collections per year every year (and I have about 50 years in my head right now, so that might be ramped up)  Right now all the photos on the site are just stock photos off the web execpt the 1 shot of my prototypes.  Once I have my "real" samples I will have a full photo shoot and the pics will tell the story.  I agree that the pictures of the product in use are VITAL!  I am compiling all of these fantastic comments and suggestions so once I have my pictures I can do 1 big ol`update and then of course, ask for another round of comments.  I am so lucky to have such a great resource in the minds of the SuN community.  THANK YOU!

 

Greg, good to see you over here!  Thanks for stopping by  My MSRP is $19.95  for a Collection of 6 solid stainless Steel Charms.   Thank you for the encouragement and I can`t wait to have you as a happy customer!

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Leslie
Founder and President
Charmed Life Products LLC
Grill Charms™… The MUST HAVE grilling accessory that is revolutionizing the American Cook-out AND The perfect gift for any occasion!
Grill Charms
                                                                                                    

Looks fantastic, Leslie! I don`t think I have anything to add.

Job "Well-Done"...he he he (couldn`t resist).

 

 

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Melissa Yamello
Owner/Designer
Storybook Studio
www.storybookstudio.net

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Greg, I really loved your web site.

Ha!  Thanks Melissa!!!!  It is "rare" to find a site that doesn`t need anything

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Leslie
Founder and President
Charmed Life Products LLC
Grill Charms™… The MUST HAVE grilling accessory that is revolutionizing the American Cook-out AND The perfect gift for any occasion!
Grill Charms
                                                                                                    

Leslie,
The price looks real good.  Have you considered a web site sales exclusive for ala cart selecting of 6 designs of ones own choosing?  I know it would be impossible to do that for retail stores. For example, I would like to give some friends a set but she likes black bears and he likes golfing, and to round out the set of 6, maybe select designs that might bring back memorable situations.

Also, how about another collection to add to your 50+ years, Monopoly!!!  Everyone either wants the race car or the top hat or dancing ballerina or.....

Oh, and put me in your data base (or on a sheet of paper) for orders in the future so I know when they are available.


Cookie Monster,
Thanks for the vote of confidence.  I have a few more things to do to it before my submission to the pros at SuN.

Greg