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Looks pretty easy to read.   competent is spelled incorrectly.  I would change the punctuation  in the intro.  Remove some commas, add periods, make whole sentences.

Bobson, hope you`re having a lovely day. See now I`m not mean.

I don`t like any of it, they have the feel of a computer site from the 90`s. There are 1,000`s of free templates you could download that will make your services look more professional. If you dont know CSS already, take a day off and learn it, someone with your computer skills can pick it up easily.  Also, it seems to me you`re more focused on putting ads all over the place instead of advertising what`s really important, your business and how you can help. Honestly, your site isn`t going to be driving thousands of visitors a day so why even put the Google ads on it? It`ll probably take you a year to even earn the $100 payout.

The blog is the same, ads, ads, ads and a font of a dos prompt.


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Hey there.. :-D
I looked at both sites, and they both need work. The consulting site is hard to read given the layout and brash colors. The "How to" site is even harder, with navy-blue on black, giving almost no visual contrast.

I concur that the consulting site looks like a NACAR vehicle. Looking at the home page, I see you`re a consultant but I have no clue what it is you`re consulting about.

On the "How to" site, I don`t understand why the first thing I see is that I should download free software. I`m not even sure what it is I`m going to learn how to fix.

You`ll want on the How To site at least an index or table of contents, or some form of search capability. You`ll also want to explain immediately what it is that people are going to learn "how to" fix. The title being PC Fixes, there`s a major contradiction in logic at the moment.

On the other site, being a "computer consultant" doesn`t say anything, really. I`m guessing, but it sounds as if you`re actually Systems Analysts with the option of implementation. That would include buying client-approved hardware and software, then doing an installation?

If so, you should use your space on the home page to highlight that, rather than some vague term like "consultant."

What both sites lack is a core message. That message shouldn`t be what you do, nobody really cares. It should be what you offer the visitor. That distinction between perspectives is the leading problem I see everywhere online and in business.

Nobody really cares what you`re doing. That`s your life, your adventure, your time. What everybody cares about is how "this site" (whatever they`ve clicked on) will have any kind of impact or effect on their own life and time.

I can`t envision anyone going to Google and typing in "computer consultant." See? Instead, ask yourself what they *would* type into Google. That`ll require having a solid product, message, mission, and offer of some sort.

First impression ..... narrow page, little content, hard to read text, clashing colors, too many ads ....

A wider, lighter look would help .... make it easier to read .... you don`t need anything fancy to be effective .... coding and SEO are not good, or effective, and are probably hurting you more than anything .....


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M Hall
Website Critique Community
International Society of Curmudgeons

I took into consideration some o your comments and took a couple of days and redid my site from scratch, so can you please critique the bobsonconsulting.com site, the other is just a blog I am playing with, don`t worry about that one much, but please critique the new revised bobsonconsulting.com

In all honesty, no better than the first one .... the large images and ads overwhelm everything else.

The structure, the message and the end goal,  i.e., the "concept", needs to be thought out and in place and taken care of first .... then you add the trim and decorations and the rest ....

Look at it this way .... if you take out all of the ads, and all of the large images, what`s left is pretty much your content and your message to your users .... seeing it that way, with only your content, would you sell yourself on what you see?



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M Hall
Website Critique Community
International Society of Curmudgeons

OK, I am mean.  I am licensed to be mean, and I was a software engineer in a previous life so I am really mean to other engineers.

WE, We, we, we, we, we - It`s all about "We".

You need to rewrite everything.  Change the perspective from "All about we.." to "All about you, the client".  The client doesn`t care about you - what is the benefit to me, the client?

State the clients problem, then how you will fix it.  "You are confused about setting up routers, switches and hubs in your office network and Bobson Consulting will make sense of it for you and assure the most efficient use of your network assets."  sounds a lot more convincing than asking the client if their network needs help.  (How do they know they need help if it sort of works?)

You also need a hook - maybe something that doesn`t cost you a lot - like a free telephone consult to discuss network or PC problems.  This gives you an opportunity to build a client list for follow-up offers.  When you get busy and don`t have time to take these calls, just take the offer off the web site.



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Steve Mann
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Thank you , I do need more and better content but just don`t know what to write