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I would appreciate your comments.

I`ve had my site up for a few months and even though I`m working with a Promo service regarding keywords I`m not receiving any calls.

What can I do? My site is: www:businessbuilderscoaching.com

Thank you

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Leslie,your business doctor

Hi Wordwarrior,

Your site is obviously geared to a person who has never been involved in business either on his/her own or as part of a management team working for a company. However, you are seeking people who are already in business. IMO the approach you use is something that maybe an early teen could benefit from, but your intended to target audience are adults with not only the responsibilities of the average adult but somebody who also has taken the responsibilities of opening and running a business. I believe these two to be incompatible, you should either tailor your approach to a businessperson using language that he/she will be able to relate to and make him/her take you seriously, or target the teens with no work experience.

It`s too busy. The font is too small, with the result that it looks like "too many words."

What I`d recommend is to first develop in your mind and on a piece of scratch paper, the bullet points. Who are you, what problem do you see not being met, what do you offer, and what do you do. (What you offer and what you do are two different things.)

I`d then talk with a graphics layout person, and see if you can come up with a more easily read layout, at least for the home page.

Consider this sentence:

What does that even mean? :-) If you`re going to be a business coach, who`s your target market? If they`re corporate employees, the sentence makes sense....but they`re already employees working for someone. If you`re going to help small business owners, they either hate the jargon, or they don`t understand it.

I tend to agree with ElidS, that there`s a bit too much confusion, as well as the seeming or implied contradiction.

looks like it was designed in 1995 - check out these CSS directories for design ideas - cssmania.com cssbeauty.com or csselite.com

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