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Angel Ornaments by Ultimate Awards & Engraving

This year give that special someone in your life a gift that`s as unique as they are.

Our wooden Angel ornaments, which you can personalize with your own message, are approximately 3 3/4" high and 2 1/2" wide (depending on the specific design you choose).
Your ornament is adorned with a ribbon and ready to be hung on your Christmas tree!

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Kudos to theswaynester for the re-write of the ad.

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jcoffman, do you think the price at $8.00 is reasonable?

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knockknockhlo... You may want to run a spellcheck your link coz "coz:" aint a real word.  I imagine it will be real hard tying to sell someone your ability to write a competent sales letter when your own page is full of typos and gramatical errors.

Rite and i never said i am great copywriter and this sales letter is just 3 days old and i have to proofread it.But what i know even with that sales letter which i know got many mistakes , i got 70% response ,thats strange.well, strange for me.

 Anyway ,you just asked for comment

The auction is now up. Please take a peek and let me know what you think.

http://cgi.ebay.com/ws/eBayISAPI.dll?ViewItem&ih=009& ;item=190031152975&rd=1&sspagename=STRK%3AMESE%3AIT& amp;rd=1

 

Thank you to everyone that helped with the copywork.

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I need to figure out a way to create a table with the photos in it so the auction page isnt so looong.

Well , this time auction looks great , i really want to appreciate photos. Photos are great and it seem like someone professional took these photos.From my experience ,  lengthy  auction description is good.Another thing which you can do is add animated fotos , well these days trend is to add video message , but your auction look fine.