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I am creating an eBay auction for some personalized wooden Angel christmas ornaments that will run through the end of the year.  Writing good copy is not a strongpoint of mine.  Here is what I have come up with so far, please feel free to comment and suggest any changes as you see fit. I do not know if the formatting/color is going to display well here:

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Angel Ornaments

by

Ultimate Awards & Engraving

Looking for a unique personalized gift that is as special as the person that is going to receive it?

Our Angel ornaments can each be personalized with your message.

Each ornament measures approximately 3 3/4" high by approximately 2 1/2" wide, depending on the specific design you choose.  Your ornament will arrive in a red velvet gift bag.  Each ornament is adorned with a ribbon so that it is ready to hang on a christmas tree!

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Here is a link to a page with some photos of the actual product

http://www.ultimateawards.net/angel/angel.html

I am looking at a Buy It Now price of $7.00-$9.00.  Some input here as well would be most appreciated.

Hey there--
I sent you a message with my shot at this.

The Swaynester

Ooh you so get a 5 rating for that copy!

Do you feel that the personalized ornament is worth the price?

The link to the photos was for the forum`s benefit. the photos will be displayed inside the auction itself.

We have the patterns to do well over 170 different signs, but we decided to focus on the angels for this christmas.

Since you agree the price is a great bargain how many should I put ya down for to order?

I want a "Happy Festivus" ornament.

In my opinion your auction ad is nice and clear.  One of my best tips about Ebay listing is to write an auction ad in such a way that you do not get tons of emails requesting more information.  There are some details missing in your ad such as~ What are the ornaments made of.... wood, metal?  How is the customization applied? and what other designs are available?  

When I list online my auction ads also state a few lines about shipping and return policy. 

Your starting range isn`t too bad as ornaments go but the buyer will want more information.

I checked out the pictures and it may be better for the images to be slightly smaller.  Even as big as the images are I could not tell the materials.  I`m just now learning to resize pictures to optimize viewing same on my web site and what a pain in the neck!

Here`s a link to my active Ebay auctions if you want to check out an example of how I worded my shipping and return policy info.  Once you get your auction ad complete saving it to a template is a good idea.  Saves lots of time.

Thanks for the tips.  They are made out of Alder wood and personalized with a laser engraver.  It actually burns the wood at a very high resolution.  I dont think we are going to list the other designs inside the Angel auction. 

I do want to run a 2nd auction with the different designs in it... I just havent figured out how to show EVERYTHING that we can do with them.

Truth be told... we can take any vector image and turn it into an "ornament". Logos, sports, etc.

Hi ,

     If thats the whole description , thenn  sorry to say but it sucks , sorry buddy , but u asked for advice and thats my true advice , though i am also learning this thing , you can check out mine at www.writers.homestead.com/proposal.html   and please rate mine also.