Hi Karie,
Congratulations on realizing your dream. I like your business idea, however the website needs some work. As Craig mentioned grammar, punctuation and spelling need your immediate attention.
Here are some suggestions:
Home
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- the sentence "Let us be your personal..." is broken up, leaving a huge gap between words
- in the bullet "many, many other skills.." remove one "many" and change "to" to "too"
- change "corrospondance" to "correspondence"
What Can OCA Do For You?
- change "corrospondance" to "correspondence"
- change "equiptment" to "equipment"
- change "in there own" to "in their own"
- change "calender" to "calendar"
Ethics of An OCA VA
- change "other`s" to "others"
- change "personel" to "personal"
- change "employee`s" to "employees"
- change "clieent" to "client"
- change "clients" to "client`s"
How to make your OCA VA Love You Forever
- Share: change "your" to "you are"
- Honesty: reword the whole sentence
Meet the OCA Staff
- reword sentence "Without them, I don`t think I could have done it"
The Cost of Having Your Personal OCA VA
- change "escpecially" to "especially"
- change "equiptment" to "equipment"
- change "workmans comp. issurance" to "workman`s compensation insurance"
- reword "We have package deals range in various block deals..."
- change "reciept" to "receipt"
Hope this helps. Try adding more color and maybe some graphics to spruce up the visual aspect of the website.
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