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mbertrand

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Nov 23, 2010 10:19 AM ET    Quote  Report Abuse
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This is all unbelievably helpful for the most novice all the way to experts in business.  Thank you all for the excellent advice and helpful hints.  All that gooshy stuff said, I have a start up company I am trying to fund and launch, so this thread is especially helpful since I am getting ready to approach possible investors for capital.  My company is web-based and connects quality pre-screened tenants with equally qualified landlords.  What I have been telling people is to imagine careerbuilder.com, but for landlords (taking the place of employers) and tenants (taking the place of the prospective employee on the job hunt). 

 

My elevator pitch:

 

Individually empowering, financially sound real estate solutions managed by you.

What do you think?  Is it too fluffy with not enough defining content or am I on the right track?  Thanks so much for your valuable feedback in advance!

 

 



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My elevator pitch:

 

Individually empowering, financially sound real estate solutions managed by you.

What do you think?  Is it too fluffy with not enough defining content or am I on the right track?  Thanks so much for your valuable feedback in advance!

 

 

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Mbertrand,
I'd say that it is too "fluffy" and really doesn't say what benefit you provide.  For your general quick description - consider fine tuning your "connects  Prue-screened tenants with equally qualified landlords"
For capital sources, I'd include your "like careerbuilder" comparison
in the initial approach message. 
While a attention grabbing approach message is important - you will need to prepare in order to successfully acquire capital while remaining compliant
If you wish to discuss your situation, feel free to drop me a Pm or contact me directly




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JDAnderson

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Effective Publicity That Won't Make You Go Broke

 

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Real estate investment? Over-saturated.  Funding those investments? Highly needed.

Best I could do at this hour.

Shawn Garza



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Seventhman

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Here's mine:  We help your business save money and accelerate growth!



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