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Bedford Marketing and INNovations

Our company is called Bedford Marketing and INNovations (BMI); The Business, Income and Opportunities Provider. There is currently no company available that offers the range and latitude of opportunities that BMI has designed and is currently implementing.

BMI`s unlimited income oportunities include:

The Idea Development program, which helps develop and produce all viable member product, service and process innovations.

The BMG Marketing and Distribution programs, which will be used to ensure the success of every member innovation.

The ISA Participatory Programs, which will offer income opportunities at levels that don`t currently don`t exist.

These Core Competencies of BMI will create an unparallelled competitive advantage over any new competitor that may enter the market. The core motivational factor of entreprenuership is to create as much profit as possible, thus any new competitors will price themselves out of the market place. Our goal and "Purpose in Life" is to create as many successful opportunities as possible, not just profits. With that being said "Successful Opportunities" by defination will create profit. Secondly, By the time any potential competitor realizes the value of the BMI programs, we will have already created a large enough market with a vested interest in its success that every new competitor will only, and always, be second in the market place.

I am the CEO, Founder and Professional Problem Solver for BMI. We are not currently seeking any financial assistance or funding for the startup or continued operations of the business. We are in the process of developing new businesses with experts from different industries to ensure a market vast enough for every conceivable product, service and process Innovation to be implemented.

We have polled several dozen potential members and customers, which has resulted in a 100% positive response to the benefits and opportunities presented. We have concluded that our target market consists of every non financially secure person in the world and half of those who are. Also that, as the programs grows it becomes exponentialy stronger.

We have implemented no exit strategy because BMI was designed for continuous growth and opportunity development.

Ideasand Innovations,

Thanks for submitting your elevator pitch for critique by the community.

Have you checked out the page on how to deliver a great elevator pitch? Remember that an elevator pitch is more than simply an marketing pitch, it`s an attempt to attract investment in your company. There is a sample pitch on the page I linked to and you can even listen to a terrific one delivered by Ginny of Flawless Sunless Tanning Solutions.

When you state above that you are not looking for any financial assistance or funding, this turns into an opportunity pitch - which is very cool, just not what we`re trying to create this forum to accomplish.

We will be launching a new resource here at StartupNation.com in a month that will be perfect for listing products, services and opportunities for the entire community to browse & search & respond to.

Stay tuned!

Thanks for sharing your opportunity IdeasandInnovations. I`ll look forward to it being one of the first listings in the new Marketplace resource!!

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Bedford Marketing and INNovations

Our company is called Bedford Marketing and INNovations (BMI); The Business, Income and Opportunities Provider. There is currently no company available that offers the range and latitude of opportunities that BMI has designed and is currently implementing.

BMI`s unlimited income oportunities include:

The Idea Development program, which helps develop and produce all viable member product, service and process innovations.

The BMG Marketing and Distribution programs, which will be used to ensure the success of every member innovation.

The ISA Participatory Programs, which will offer income opportunities at levels that don`t currently don`t exist.

These Core Competencies of BMI will create an unparallelled competitive advantage over any new competitor that may enter the market. The core motivational factor of entreprenuership is to create as much profit as possible, thus any new competitors will price themselves out of the market place. Our goal and "Purpose in Life" is to create as many successful opportunities as possible, not just profits. With that being said "Successful Opportunities" by defination will create profit. Secondly, By the time any potential competitor realizes the value of the BMI programs, we will have already created a large enough market with a vested interest in its success that every new competitor will only, and always, be second in the market place.

I am the CEO, Founder and Professional Problem Solver for BMI. We are currently seeking 10 millions dollars which will be used for inventory resources and will be repaid from the profits of the business.  In return you will recieve a 1% interest in a business in which has an ultimate goal of sales that will reach 25% of the GDP. We are also in the process of developing new businesses with experts from different industries to ensure a market large enough for every conceivable product, service and process Innovation.

We have polled several dozen potential members and customers, which has resulted in a 100% positive response to the benefits and opportunities presented. We have concluded that our target market consists of every non financially secure person in the world and half of those who are. Also that as the programs grows it becomes exponentialy stronger.

We have implemented no exit strategy because BMI was designed for continuous growth and opportunity development.

Too much, too much, too much. Simplify, simplify, simplify. An elevator pitch needs to be 30 seconds or less. That`s the whole idea ... you run into someone in an elevator and you have only enough time to spit out a few sentences.

I`ll go into some detail below, but I`m sorry to say, this pitch is poorly done in almost every sense. In addition to being utterly vague, it`s totally full of jargon, cliches, and meaningless drivel. It`s not plainspoken and straightforward. It almost has no discernible meaning, except I suppose to you. This isn`t meant to sound overly harsh, but honestly, I have no idea what you`re talking about. None whatsoever. Perhaps you are a highly abtract thinker, but a pitch isn`t supposed to be abstract. Pitches are supposed to be direct and concise.

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"There is currently no company available that offers the range and latitude of opportunities that BMI has designed and is currently implementing."

This is just typical business plan speak. Typical for someone without much business experience. You`re suggesting that you have no competitors, which seems incredible. Most bankers and/or venture capitalists really don`t like to hear this. It makes you look inexperienced. Good ideas always have competition.

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"The Idea Development program, which helps develop and produce all viable member product, service and process innovations."

"The BMG Marketing and Distribution programs, which will be used to ensure the success of every member innovation."

"The ISA Participatory Programs, which will offer income opportunities at levels that don`t currently don`t exist."

I`m going to be very blunt. These phrases are utterly meaningless. It`s pure jargon, cliche, and drivel. It tells me absolutely nothing about BMI. It`s just wasted words. Try being plainspoken and straightfoward instead.

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"These Core Competencies of BMI will create an unparallelled competitive advantage over any new competitor that may enter the market. The core motivational factor of entreprenuership is to create as much profit as possible, thus any new competitors will price themselves out of the market place. Our goal and "Purpose in Life" is to create as many successful opportunities as possible, not just profits. With that being said "Successful Opportunities" by defination will create profit. Secondly, By the time any potential competitor realizes the value of the BMI programs, we will have already created a large enough market with a vested interest in its success that every new competitor will only, and always, be second in the market place."

Meaningless. You talk about unparalled competitive advantage like a man who thinks he can control the market. You also provide absolutely no supporting evidence or ideas. Opportunities? What opportunities? Successful opportunities by definition will create profit? Huh? This isn`t how the world works, it`s not how markets work, and it`s certainly not how business works.

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"I am the CEO, Founder and Professional Problem Solver for BMI. We are not currently seeking any financial assistance or funding for the startup or continued operations of the business. We are in the process of developing new businesses with experts from different industries to ensure a market large enough for every conceivable product, service and process Innovation.

We have polled several dozen potential members and customers, which has resulted in a 100% positive response to the benefits and opportunities presented. We have concluded that our target market consists of every non financially secure person in the world and half of those who are. Also that as the programs grows it becomes exponentialy stronger.

We have implemented no exit strategy because BMI was designed for continuous growth and opportunity development."

Are you going to make me read more of this? Here`s a tip. If your target market consists of every person who is non-financially secure ... uh ... how about just saying "Our target market is composed of individuals with financial problems." In addition, if your target market is so broad, it`s not really a target market at all. It`s a market segment.

 

 

Thanks cookiemonster,

that is the feedback Im looking for,  If I could have two or three others be plan and blunt  I will be a very very happy man because the information I am getting is much more than writing an elevator pitch  

and just for the record

There is currently no company available that offers the range and latitude of opportunities that BMI has designed and is currently implementing

none are in existance and yes it is incredible

This is just typical business plan speak. Typical for someone without much business experience.

Knowing what I know and having what I have,  there is no other way to properly describe the program in one sentence.  but then again everybodyhere should already know that my grammar sucks.

Your feedback  is very valuable, it gives me a snapshot of how you perceive the image of the program or at least how i have explained it and that snapshot  is exactly what I was looking for when I wrote it. 

that snapshot  is about what I expected.  unfortunately I do not know  how to give people a better  picture of the program without showing them the photograph itself and then we all know  what comes next.  Other  people will also have the same program.

I guess that is what I need help with...

1. How does one show how good programs  X  Y  and Z  are  without telling them  the programs.  and

2. How do you prove to someone the value of the program without explaining the program  and demonstrating it.  

here at the beginning stages  is where I need people to take a leap of faith  but on the other hand the people that I need to leap are the most skeptical and most likly need to see the program work,  the problem is that I wont need help  at all after I have demonstrated  the potential of the program.

I have just answered all my questions, My problem solving skills  have just told me that  i can not solve my problem within the parameters  i have establish.

 

Here I have the perfect marketing program, but most people will never believe that there is such a program ,  thus needing it to demonstrated, but once  I demonstrate it,  I will no longer need the people who needed the proof of demonstration because i will have all the financing  that I will need to purchase any and all services  I need to continue the growth and development of the program.

What a predicament to be in.  I would like to thank you all for allowing me to self-brainstorm on this forum (others may call it deduce ...its all the same to me).  If anybody would like to take part within this unbelieveable program  you are invited.  Just for the record I won`t need assistance after the fact as i already have explained.

last note  I may revise the pitch just for kicks  LOL

 

Mike

Thanks for the reply. I still don`t understand your program or ideas. I wasn`t complaining about your grammar. I made rather pointed remarks about the total lack of clarity and the wide ranging generalities. It doesn`t make sense to me. Perhaps I should be even clearer. After I read your pitch I had absolutely no sense of your idea. It seemed like complete nonsense. Like a long list of sentences that had very little relation to one another.

It`s just not credible to say that you have no competition. And if it`s as good an idea as you say, you will have competition soon after launch. Your pitch describes a system that is immune to competition. Except that`s not how the world works. I really don`t know what to make of the pitch. It makes no sense whatsoever to me.

 

Thanks for the reply. I still don`t understand your program or ideas.

After I read your pitch I had absolutely no sense of your idea. It seemed like complete nonsense

"Our company is called Bedford Marketing and INNovations (BMI); The Business, Income and Opportunities Provider.".

........  or I can say ......We create Business opportunities and Income Opportunities. We provide opportunities.  In part this is what the McDonalds, Burger King and every other franchise corporations does, it offers a specific business and income opportunities. 

We have the marketing programs with the ability to make businesses successfull, so we have decided not to stop with just one business opportunity.

The problem is that I am not an expert within every industry in which I want to do business, thus I thought it would be a good idea to try to locate potential partners...  (people who know how to operate the desired business) from within a forum like this one, which I might add hasn`t been the most successful venture in my life because  when I am straight up with what I have people don`t think it is realistic as you have demonstrated

I`m going to be very blunt. These phrases are utterly meaningless. It`s pure jargon, cliche, and drivel. It tells me absolutely nothing about BMI. It`s just wasted words. Try being plainspoken and straightfoward instead.

I was being straight forward and as plainspoken as I could be without telling you how the program works,  I`m sorry but I have way to many years of effort put into this baby to have everybody on the internet able to mimic it.

I made rather pointed remarks about the total lack of clarity and the wide ranging generalities.

I thought I was clear,,,  We will be creating opportunities... as far as what opportunities lets just say every opportunity,  every type of business venture imaginable.  People ask me what as I going to sell  and I reply  "everything" and I see by the look in their eyes `yea right`.   That is why I didn`t phrase it that way within my pitch .

Im sure many people think that is just an impossibility but opening up the program actually helps make it stronger and more viable and successful not more  Not Possible.

 

It doesn`t make sense to me. Perhaps I should be even clearer. . Like a long list of sentences that had very little relation to one another.

I guess i can only say , if you read each sentence by itself and take it face value instead attaching a preconceived notion of what it means or the possibilities of whether it is possible to achieve and make happen I feel it is very comprehendable. But maybe its because I have a clear view of the whole program, instead of a limited picture of it.

It`s just not credible to say that you have no competition. 

Let me clarify,  I stated that

"There is currently no company available that offers the range and latitude of opportunities that BMI has designed and is currently implementing."

I don`t know where you got the idea that I said I have no competition.  I said there is no company available  that offers the RANGE and LATITUDE of opportunities that BMI has designed and is currently implementing.  

As a matter of fact, for the record, it is possible that every business outside my organization will be my competition at some level.

And if it`s as good an idea as you say, you will have competition soon after launch.

I understand this,  that is one reason why it has taken me so long to try to overcome that obsticle and the reason why I have to implement it in different  phases.  make no mistake about it when I stated I had obsticle and pitfall to overcome.

Your pitch describes a system that is immune to competition.

Not immune to competition, But if I implement it correctly the market share that I obtain before the competition starts will be my because of the vested interest they will realize from the program.  But thank you for noticing.

Except that`s not how the world works.

No Im going to be really cocky here  if you don`t think I have yet,    Your right that isnt the way the world works yet, When Im done that will be the way the world will work.   I have the program that will change the way business is done.  and thats a fact whether you want to believe it or not

lastly I thought I had it covered when I said

Our goal and "Purpose in Life" is to create as many successful opportunities as possible, not just profits.

Im not sure how you didnt understand what I was offering.

There are two types of people in the world,  the negative , pestimistic, devil`s advocate type who have the uncanney ability to come up with every way why something won`t work and those who think positively and come up with ways that will make it work.  I have some to the conclusion that there are few people who think the latter unless it is their program or idea the in so many cases they are blinded by there subjectivity.

i`m sorry I don`t have the time to proof read this post  because work calls.

Mike